Story Telling Unit: "Spaced" Pitch

My first attempt at creating a pitch for Spaced was a lot harder than it looked. Having only a 25 word limit to fit a straight to the point, hard hitting sales pitch was difficult as we had brainstormed so many different selling points to the series and had to choose only the strongest. 


My first attempt:


Based in a contemporary suburb, "Spaced" portrays the surreal daily life adventures of five intertwined twenty-somethings, in a slapstick thirty-minute sit-com drama.


There are some points in my pitch that could be stronger, "contemporary suburb" is not exactly a huge selling point. Again, "Thirty-minute sit-com drama" could be re-phrased to sound much more exciting.


With this in mind, here is my second attempt:


Situated in a modern city precinct, "Spaced" portrays the surreal daily life adventures of five intertwined twenty-somethings, in a slapstick comedy drama, with a twist.